Interesting premise
I liked the flash. Good job with the graphics. I felt the plot was well thought out... but it was so absurd I ended up just laughing at it. When the little girl flies in front of the train, there's something about that scene that's really funny even though you weren't going for humor with this flash. Why would she drop her present then JUMP to get it? I dunno... anyways good job.
Ha, she didn't jump to get it. Since I'm lazy and didn't draw legs on the little girl, you couldn't tell that when it fell out of her "hands" (which also don't exist) she went to grab it and fell forward.
To be honest...
I don't know if this flash is worth finishing.
I have tons of suggestions that you may or may not want to hear, considering this is just some old project that you never wanted to finish. Just apply these suggestions to future flash projects rather than this one...
1. Make the intros way quicker and a little less graphic intensive.
2. Get less repetitive music, that shit got annoying as hell.
3. Work on your character design. I little less man-boobs would be nice. Also the wierd anime style doesn't match up with the beautiful backgrounds.
4. You need serious work on you're animating. Just making a bunch of body parts and tweening them ain't gonna cut it (unless it looks really good). Also that FBF at the end was pretty bad too, work on it.
That being said, the high points of the flash were the very nice detailed background and the rain and raindrops. All very well done.
Yeh the backgrounds are actualy what I remeber spending most iof my time on.
Ehhhh
That wasn't that great. I really like your smoke effects and the part with the missiles, but why can't the rest of the graphics and animation be like that? You say the crappy graphics are for a reason... well whats the reason?
Besides that, I thought the story was dumb, not very funny. But it isn't horrible...
The graphics are crappy for a reason, and that reason is Mister Chief is the, retarded cousin of Master Chief.
Ha
Great stuff. Coudl've been way better though.
1. In color.
2. Have more frames from the movie.
3. Have their mouths move.
Definitely make another one those voices were excellent. LOL @ Frodo's voice.
1. I tried color it looked to...jpeg compressed
2. Will do next film.
3. I tried that, it just looked really bad . I think it only would have worked if I made seperate character models.
Thanks for the input and complements!
HAA
The one with teh star in teh desert was pretty funny. The rest were bad, but whatever. It looks like this will be protected anyway. I don't care.
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Contructive criticism
It's obvious to me you have a lot of artistic skill. The characters all look good and you're also pretty good at using flash. This flash is good quality and well thought out. Keep that in mind when you read the following criticism.
I thought there were many weak points to this flash. For one, the backgrounds were very plain and had no depth at all. Try using gradients next time, Or make the backgrounds in Photoshop or something. The animation ranged from great (the van driving down the street) to bad (when he did that odd flip move and killed everyone in the corridor). I would say one thing you need to work on is camera moves. They were basically non existent. When the character is talking, having the camera pan around them or past them. This could also improve the combat, if there were different shots (such as close-ups, motion blur, panning, etc.). Finally, I can't really say much on the storyline because I don't have the patience to watch the first two, but it seems a little weak. Maybe its just because I can't follow it... well anyways, good job and I hope to see you use some of these suggestions in the next episode.
I appreciate your compliments as well as your criticizm and I plan to keep it in mind when I make Episode IV. Thanks.
Nice tutorial
Nice tutorial. This probably tought a lot of people new stuff. I'm hoping flashes like this will cut down the crap that comes into this portal everyday.
But the guy below is right, it's phoneme, not phonim... and I think some of the phonemes that you used weren't the best. The R one looked a little wierd and when the guy said 'you' it could've been an E to a U phoneme.
That's really nitpicking though, if that were in an actual movie and I only saw it played once, it would be unnoticable.
That is why I say have a mirror... and say the line and watch your own mouth... Sorry about the misspelled phonemes... I can't fix it cause I will have to rework alot of text... Anyone who really cares... I will take the blame... but hoping not to get the BLAM. MY BAD. But the basic info should still be good. And I believe its pronounced about the same... If it isn't... MY BAD!
Very thoughtful
Nicely done, very thoughtful and great story. I thought the drawings were good, but it could've done better with a less cartoony feel. The backgrounds were also slightly lacking. Most of all you need to hone your animation skills, simply because there are a few scenes that looks sketchy. But hey this was a great movie and I'll cry if it gets blammed. Stupid asshole NG users have no appreciation for good work.
exactly. you are probably the only one I know who has realized how hard it is to get a good cartoon on this site
HA!
Very funny stuff. I don't understand ways #3, #5, #6 or #7 LOL those steps were all really messed up. But the other steps had some funny jokes in them. Very good self parody here. 4/5
3 - skipping a scene is also being lazy ;)
5 - doing cool stuff like that doesnt take effort.
6 - nothing to explain really, its as it seems.
7 - 404/broken picture
Umm..
Something tells me this isn't your work...
Just looks like you imported a screen saver into flash. Well it wasn't totally awful... pretty trippy... but I don't think you did any work on this..
Action script.
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